3 Pages of Script- Second Story

 Writing the first three pages of our Second Script


Covers is what i've decided to call this story. ( click Covers for Script )

I took on board everything that was said last week and decided to change it completely. But now i think i've stripped it back too much to the point it hasn't really got a good enough ending. I thought maybe Casimir is sacked for disappearing through service? Maybe Luke could grass on him? then Carmen checks the CCTV seeing he's feeding his family leftovers.   

I know i need to:

-Make Carmen be a bit meaner. 

- Justify Carmen looking at CCTV, Joe Johnson suggested that there could be a brick thrown through the window or an attempted burglary? 

- Focus more on Casimir and Carmen 



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